ارے آپ guys who like vampires can آپ do me a favor???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can آپ guys read it and tell me what آپ think in a تبصرہ یا email?
And I don't no the name yet so can آپ guys help out with that to? Its not very long یا hard to read.Oh and I can give آپ a link to it.