I need help writing a song!

This is a song I wrote.
PLEASE help me ترمیم it!

Dying 4 U:

When the sun rises up in the sky,
I think about you.
When everything seems alright,
I hide the fact that,
I really do want you.
Don’t think I could live without you.
Nobody knows.
And I won’t tell them.

I can shake you.
I may break you.
But you’ll never know how I feel.
I’m playing hard-to-get.
Just don’t get upset.
When it burns my دل
to let آپ go.
Gotta let آپ know.
I’m dying for you.
Dying for you.

When آپ try
to act
so cool.
And it doesn’t work out.
I, I think it’s cute.
But آپ could never know.
Oh, oh, oh.
When آپ flip your hair
out of your eyes.
But it just gets messed up.
I, I think it’s charming.
But آپ can’t ever figure out.
No, no, no.

I can shake you.
I may break you.
But you’ll never know how I feel.
I’m playing hard-to-get.
Just don’t get upset.
When it burns my دل
to let آپ go.
Gotta let آپ know.
I’m dying for you.
Dying for you.

Can’t take it anymore.
I want آپ سے طرف کی my side.
When I’m alone at night.
Hold my hand.
Tell me that آپ love me.
Need you, want you.
Can’t live another دن without you.

I can shake you.
I may break you.
But you’ll never know how I feel.
I’m playing hard-to-get.
Just don’t get upset.
When it burns my دل
to let آپ go.
Gotta let آپ know.
I’m dying for you.
Dying for you.

Dying, hurting, when you’re deserting.
Helpless, needless.
Want آپ so bad.
Dying for you.
Dying for you.


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PftFan99 said:
It seems fine to me.. it doesn't need any editing. It is perfect the way it is.

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Wow.Encouragement.Best and Only.
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cloudstrifefan said:
Beautiful.Post a video of آپ singing it on YouTube and maybe you'll be discovered and get money.
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i agree with him!!!!
lois4 posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک
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I'm a girl...
cloudstrifefan posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک
LadyL68 said:
Beautiful:) don't change a bit of it...
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Amberla said:
Very emotional song... I like it :) Especially the lines:

I can shake you
I may break you

Hahahha xD lol can't stop laughting, sorry!
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XxEmolovexX said:
awesomeo


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dodo_isgreetfan said:
its aswam
u can add this if u want
if u hold me i will sheak , if u drop me i will break ,if u dont call i will worry ,and if u need me i will hurry ,if u hurt me i will cry , but if u leave me i will die
hope iu like it
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