What do آپ think of this پرستار Fiction?

I am writing a Bones پرستار fiction, and I was wondering what other Bones شائقین think of it.
So I'll tell آپ the plot, and then I'll let آپ read a little bit from the first part!

Plot;
Booth gets a call from the army; they need him, and him only. Serving his country is his duty, but there is too much to lose.
His relationship with Brennan reaching higher levels makes his choice even مزید difficult.

Will he choose staying with Brennan, یا will he serve his country one last time?

First part;
Sunlight enters the room trough the opened door. He yawns and stretches his right arm; he’s lying on the left. He turns around, lies on his back. He isn’t fully awake yet. But when he notices someone lying اگلے him he turns so fast he falls out of the bed. The woman lying اگلے to him wakes up سے طرف کی hearing the noise of falling people.
‘Booth, what happened?’ she asks.
‘I, eh... I fell!’ he answers.
‘You fell from the couch?’
‘Couch? Yeah, the couch, yeah I fell from the couch!’ he answers, confused. Brennan turns from her right to her left, so she can look through the door.
‘Where are you?’ she asks.
‘Here!’ Booth raises his right arm so it sticks out above the bed.
‘When did آپ get in here?’ she asks, standing up.
‘I.. I crawled here.’ Booth stands up.
‘You crawled here?’

Tell me what آپ think!
And suggestions are welcome!

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