cool cant wait till you post

Good luck with your story. And post soon.

Great post soon

chapter 1

percys pov

let me tell you this i am having the worst day ever. why? well lets see i woke up in a car holding hands with a girl (this isn't the bad part) i didn't know. there was a boy who was driving up front .
"who are you" i asked the girl with black hair and red highlights
"percy what are you talking about"she said after looking at me with her black eyes

"how do you know my name' i asked
the kid in front said "because shes your girlfriend"
the girl blushed but when she saw my confused look she became worried
"you really dont know who we are" she asked i shook my head
"well im rosalina li ezrano but everyone calls me rose thats drake beckendorf" rose said.beckendorf i thought it sounded really familiar
"rose dont listen to him hes just getting back at me for pranking him last time "
"drake the wheel!!!"
"whoah!!!"
"what are you guys talking about'
"we should talk to lupa about this he must have amnesia"rose said
"whos lupa" i asked
"well were at the urbs so we might as well tell lupa" said drake

sorry that its short

Great fanficton so I'm guessing your going to do a Percy version of the lost hero?either way good job

Great start. And it does sound a lot like the lost hero. Anyways it is still good.

Coolio. It seems like a good start though you should check capitalization and punctuation.

Nice start! Good job! Jus try to make EM longer

Unknownquestion yeah im kinda doing a percy version of the lost hero.
Safree Ill start checking it because im not really good at that.
Thanks to any one who is reading this I will make them longer I just posted that one at night and I was tired.By the way this is what roses hair looks like.i changed my mind her hair is red with black highlights

not bad but the charaters have surnames of people percy knows and knew.i think it has to get a bit longer.but its good post soon

chapter 2
Roses pov
When we got to the urbs we bumbed into Reyna Castellan.
"Have you guys seen Jason?" Reyna asked.
"Sorry Reyna I haven't. "
"Oh."
"Hey Reyna do you know how to cure amnesia."
"Yeah"She said"just hit the person on the head"
Percy looked nervously at Drake and Reyna went back to looking for Jason. Drake quickly grabbed a bat from the floor.
"Don't even think about it!" Percy yelled.
"Hey do you want your memories back"Drake said holding the bat tighter.
"GUYS!!!" I said.
"Don't come near me with that bat." Percy said.
"Okay."Drake said putting the bat down.
"Lets go see Lupa guys."I said.
"Umm Rose why bother Lupa when we can just fix Percy by ourselves."Drake said holding the bat again
"Yeah thats a great idea." Percy said.
"Really" Drake asked.
"NO!!!"Percy said.
"Come on we better get going before you two kil eachother."I said.
"Yeah we can go right after you tell me what this place is."Percy said.
"Percy if this is a prank Lupa will kill us" I told percy .
"Its not."He said
"Okay this is a camp-"
"Camp more like milatary school."Drake said.
"Drake be quiet. Percy this is a camp for demigods."I said.
"Oh. What are demigods? "he asked.
"Demigods are half mortal half god.My dads Pluto Drakes dad is Vulcan and your dad is Neptune." I said.
"Don't you mean Hades Hephaestus and Posiden."Percy said.
"Dont be silly Percy greek gods dont exist"I said.
"Okay well lets go see Lupa."

Percys pov

"So this is Lupas place."I said.
"Yep." Drake said.
"So lets go in.Oh and Percy dont show any fear to Lupa or she will eat you alive." rose said.
"Well she seems nice."I said.
Inside we saw a wolf.Drake and Rose bowed and said Lupa.
"Who is this." Lupa asked staring at me.
"Lupa this is Percy remember hes been here since he was 12."rose said.
"No he hasnt the mist is fooling you."Lupa said.
"The mist but everyone remembers Percy except you Lupa."drake said.
"Rose Drake I want to speak to him alone."Lupa said,and I knew something bad was going to happen Rose and Drake looked a bit sorry for me but went outside.
"Son of Posiden what are you doing here."Lupa said.
"I don't know" I said.
"Well do not talk greek to my campers."Lupa said.
"Greek what are you talking about." I asked her.
"Well your speaking greek right now."Lupa said and i realized she was right.
When I opened the door Rose and Drake fell down.
"You speak greek?"drake asked me.

thanks for reading guys

watch out for those spelling errors but otherwise great story how often do you post?

i really dont know ill try to post probably mondays tuesdays friday and saturday. im so glad you liked it ill work on my spelling

it's good i like it
cool idea with some repeat/familiar last names

Awsome chapter(:

thank you

Awesome chapter and funny, too. Can't wait for you to post!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks.Do you guys really like it?

Duh of course!

Yeah for reals.

I really like this! Just try and slow down the plot a little and edit the spelling errors.

Sorry, I'm a major perfectionst.

P.S. About the Urbs? I think you should probably ask Calypso0 if you can use that name for the Roman camp as that's the one she uses.

oh i knew i had heard that name some where well i think i will ask calypso0. i really liked her story but she didnt make a sequel oh well.glad you liked it

Great story

really good. post soon

guys heres my schedule ill try to post on all weekdays because my family usualy does some things on sataurdays and sundays

Sounds good

Yay you made the second page unknownquestion.Here have a cake for that.

Thank you thank you

Hey guys im working on chapter 3 let me say theres going to be a suprise to all you percabeth lovers

Uh oh Percy has another girlfriend!

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So far so good, I guess...

One suggestion: Use proper capitalization. Trust me, once you do that, your story looks more professional, and easier to read.

Yeah ill try to do that Partypony oh btw Percy sees Annabeth but she dosent see him.

CHAPTER 2
Drakes pov
"you speak greek "i asked Percy
"I guess,wait you heard everything I just said"Percy asked
"Yeah , but we didnt understand it"i replied
"well all she said is that im not from here and not let anyone hear me speak greek"percy said
"well then we've all been controlled by the mist"I said
"No it couldnt have been the mist"Rose said almost crying
"rose"percy said
"i need to go" rose said and ran away crying towards her cabin.
"im gonna go talk to her"percy said and ran after rose. after that i went to the forges.usually i go to the forges because i can find my siblings there.today i went because i needed a new sword.when i got there nobody was at the forges.
"drake"a voice said in my head"I amk vesta i need for you to get a quest to save me"
I was about to say something when i collapsed on the floor
roses pov
as i ran i felt awfull. how could i have said that?i must have looked like a fool to percy.when i got to my cabin there waqs a girl there who reminded me of vesta.
"hello rose"the girl said.
"hello"i said back
"rose do you think im really here" the girl asked
"yes i" replied thinking seriously what kind of questionis that?
'you are wrong rose i, vesta am talking to you in your mind"vesta said
"vesta"isaid bowing
"rose ineed you and your friends to get a quest to save me"she said and dissapeared
percys pov
as i ran after rose i got dizzy and dizzier untill i fell down and had a dream about gaea

TO BE CONTINUED IN CHAPTER 4


SORRY THAT ITS SO SHORT AND I DIDNT GET TO THE ANNABETH PART

oh and just to let you know if you want to you can change the name to the actual name of the camp which is camp jupiter found out today while walking past a poster anyway if you want you can edit and then erase the urbs thing by the way great post but i had a little trouble reading this

thanks for telling me how.its camp jupiter wow i wonder if they had that name before jason came to camp

by the way great post but i had a little trouble reading this

yeah im not the best writer ill try my best to make it better

It's alright it's still a good story

0_0 ....................

Poor Rose..........but Annabeth better come in and save Percy....oh...sorry I got carried away!

So, good premise for the story. Be careful with grammar, it makes it easier to read and understand. But I still like your style of writing and I look forward to more.

I hope you like mine

cant post alot because school just started a week ago for me

ummm is the suprise good or bad for percabeth fans cause i'm one? great chappie. please post soon.

Don't worry they dont break up. I'll post tomorrow.Sorry I couldn't post today.I just got a great idea for a sequel lol i havent even finished this and i already have ideas for a sequel. Better write it down before i forget it.

ummm,is this as percy and rose will not break up or...

No she was talking about percabeth to answer your question

CHAPTER 4
Percy's pov

"Perseus Jackson if you want your memories back from Hestia you must help me."Gaea said.
"Hestia took my memories."i asked.
"yes shes why you dont remember your life, friends, mom , stepdad, and girlfriend"she said
"Shes why i dont remember rose"i said but instantly knew i was wrong .
"no shes why you dont remember her"gaea waved her hand and a girl with blond curly hair apeared
"Annabeth"i said dont ask me how i know her name .i just did.i mean i knew she was important but i didnt know how.then i figured it out .poor rose i thought
"yes she is annabeth you dont remember her because hestia took your memories and she wants your help dont listen to hestia" gaea said aand before i could say something back i woke up. i got up and started running to lupas.
roses pov
after hestia left i quickly ran to lupas . on my way to lupas i ran into percy.
"hey percy" i said
"hey rose " he said
"where ya going " i asked
"to lupas " he said
"no way im going there too" i said now looking into his sea green eyes
"cool "he said
"yeah"i said back. and then the best thing ever happened
percy pov if your reading this dont kill me . she was just standing there and crazy right i just find out about annabeth and i kiss rose.
"we should go see lupa"i said after i pulled back
" yeah she said a little distracted and suprised. finnally she grabbed my hand and pulledme along saying "come on seaweed brain" for some reason seaweed brain seemed familiar. i think it had something to do with that girl gaea showed me.
roses pov
he kissed me and all i could think was best day ever!!!!
annabeths pov
i sat outside thinking what percy was doing. well i knew one thing he was definitly not kissing another girl and with that i started readin my book again.
TO BE CONTINUED IN CHAPTHER 5

cool but can you make the chapters a little longer it gives veiwers a little more to read but other than that post soon

post soon

It's pretty good, and the only things holding it back is the grammar and the...originality?
The grammar you can easily fix, but I'm not sure if I like the fact that a lot of the characters are taking after the characters from Camp Half-Blood as their siblings or something, like the "Reyna Castellan" thing, "Drake Beckendorf", "Frank Stoll", and "Josh Stoll". Like, we already have the "Thalia and Jason Grace" thing.
Other than those two factors, I love this story. Post soon!

CHAPTER 5
ROSES POV
I was suprised when Percy leaned in and kissed me.I wondered what he had to tell Lupa .when we got to Lupas we saw her talking Drake.
" Lupa it was Vesta she needs our help."drake said.
" vesta?"Percy asked.
" vesta's the roman goddess of hearth"i told Percy.
" Oh.why does Vesta need need help?"percy asked.
" i dont know.she just said she needed help."Drake said
" wait you talked to vesta i did too.She asked me for help ."i said.
" Wait Vesta is Hestia's roman form right."Percy asked.
" Yes." Lupa said.
" So this is exactly what gaea ws talking about." Percy said.
" Gaea.Who's Gaea?"I asked.
" The titan goddess of Earth." Percy said.
" You mean Terra?" I said.
" Yeah.Well Terra told me that Hestia stole my memories and now wants my help. " Percy said.
" Well then I guess we all now what to do. "I said
" What ?" Percy Lupa and Drake asked me.
" we need a quest ." I told them
" Oh." Drake said.
" Well then you must visit the oracle at once." Lupa said.
" What's the oracle." Percy said.
" We'll tell you on the way there." I said.

PERCY'S POV
For some reason I thought the oracle was either a mummy or girl with red head.So of course I was suprised when I saw a girl blonde hair
who was definetly not a mummy.
" Hey Macy." Drake said.
" Macy we need a prophecy ." Rose said.
" Oh of course nobody comes to see macy. They always need a prophecy." She said.Then green smoke came out of her mouth and she almost fell
down but Drake came with a chair.

"Four demi-gods must pass the test
before one is put to rest
to find the goddess of hearth
travel to the forbidden land on sea and earth."

" Four demigods." Rose and I said.
" Guys your looking at it all wrong. BEFORE ONE IS PUT TO REST.I now really dont want to be part of this quest.I mean
im to young to die." Drake said going on and on.
" UGHH now how are we going to stop him from freaking out."Rose said
" I know how. " I said grabbing a bat from the floor ( they're every where.)
" Let me guess. By hitting him on the head."
"Yep."
Finnaly Drake saw the bat in my hand.
" Drop the bat Percy.You can get revenge in many other ways."he said.
" You know I think this is the best way to get revenge." I told him.
" Come on lets go find the fourth demi-god. " Rose said
" Bye Macy ." We all said
" Bye. Hey guys check out the neptunes cabin." Macy told us.