Is this something that would catch your interest in a book?

I'm trying to write a novel, and I'm wondering if this is a good piece to be put in it.

"AKANE!!," I screamed. Taking my fist, I swung it at a tree. My arm went limp. Cold, wet snow hit my face as my body flung itself towards the ground. A warm hand touched my shoulder. "I think it's time to go, Daichi." I was lifted up سے طرف کی my shoulders and dragged across the snow. I was taken into a house. My house. I opened my eyes back up to see that Chouko had brought me back in and had left me اگلے to the couch. I sat back upand saw Neko sitting at the table, waiting for Chouko to come back and finish their card game.
    "Welcome back, Daichi!," Neko said, smiling at me. Her big green cat eyes stood out from the shining black hair that almost went down to her waist. Looking at her reminded me of how dull my hair was, hanging over my back.
    I climed up onto the سوفی, لٹانا and layed down. Pain swelled throughout my stomach and legs. Trying to change positions would hurt to much, and would also mean مزید blood on the couch. I looked up, staring at the wall. My leg was still bleeding, reminding me of what Akane was trying to make me look like..............a faliure.
    "Are آپ okay, Daichi?!," کہا Chouko, covering her mouth. She looked terrifyed, like half of my face had been eaten off, یا something was controlling me.
    "I'm fine, Chouko," I said. "Just get me something for my leg, please." I looked down at my leg, still bleeding. The last time something like this happend was when Akane sent out a assasin to hunt me down and kill me, along with the exception of paying him. I was a witch hunter, not a Wielder.
    Chouko took my leg and pressed a wet towel on to it. Once again, pain took over my legs and waist. My fingers dug into the pillow, some finger going deep into it.
"You really shouldn't be going out in this type of weather. I can't see a thing when I try to go hunting out there," کہا Chouko, dipping the towel into a bucket اگلے to the سوفی, لٹانا that was fillied half way with wa
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hetalianstella said:
Oh wow! Yeah it would catch my interest.

آپ are a very good writer :)
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Not all of it got put up. Danget!
CrystalNeons posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک
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And thank آپ ^^
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CielXlizzy19 said:
I mean, it's really good writing, it just seems مزید like a fanfiction than a novel.

I don't know what makes me say that, it just has that 'vibe'. .__.

But besides that, sure, it'd catch my interest I guess. If I knew what it was about, that is.
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Though, I do want to read more. Tell me when book one is published. ^-^
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mockingjay2 said:
wow that really caught my attention. if آپ start writing مضامین and post it on this پرستار club I would definitely read it. Very interesting :)
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I'm trying to o a book.I'm hopin it'll get published
CrystalNeons posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک
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well best of luck to آپ and your book and if it does get published I would definitely read it :)
mockingjay2 posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک
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Yes! I will be one of the first to read it too. :)
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seffro said:
That's good
But needs مزید bunnies :P
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 That's good But needs مزید bunnies :P
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dinu12 said:
It totally do catch my interest!!
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Spottedpool said:
yes!!!
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