I wrote this about my (now ex) boyfriend, but still felt something about the poem, if not him. I'd love some criticism on it (hopefully constructive) :).
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
آپ are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as آپ lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are دل at name.
آپ may notice that only the سیکنڈ verse rhymes, this is an attempt to دکھائیں the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
آپ are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as آپ lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are دل at name.
آپ may notice that only the سیکنڈ verse rhymes, this is an attempt to دکھائیں the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.