Twilight Series سوال

ارے do آپ like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and love in his eyes
made her feel محفوظ
when she smiled
it brightened his دن
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of love
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
love is like the wind
آپ cant see it
but آپ can feel it
love folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

twilight_lover9 posted پہلے زیادہ سے سال ایک

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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:

I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum مزید stuff bout like Vampires haha that would be interesting..

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آپ could just go to the request a peom سوال and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip

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Little_Cullen said:

LOVE it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual writing is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel محفوظ and her smile brightens his day. I love it. Keep it up!

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thank-u so much

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twilightgirlNo1 said:

i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.

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twilight0girl said:

it's a perfect poem about them.

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Twilightpup said:

Its really good , آپ should make one about Bella and Edward

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emilyemmett said:

That is really good!! آپ should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow یا Jacob and Renesmee یا something!

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sessa123 said:

Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, vampires anything lol KEEP IT UP HUN XX

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